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The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the numbers of people per household in 1990 and 2000 in New Zealand. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two pie charts illustrate how many
people
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living
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lived
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 in each New Zealand family in 1990 and 2000. In 1990,
two
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two-person
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people
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families
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are
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were
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 the most common
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households
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household
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, which took up 31%,
wherease
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whereas
 only around 7%
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families
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of families
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 had 5 or 6 members. It's shown that
the
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21% of
households
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 consisted of 3
people
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, ranking the second among all segments. The proportion of
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dwellings having 1 person and 4
person
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people
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 are the same, which
are
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is
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 17% among all
households
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 in 1990. In 2000,
families
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 with 3 members became the most
prodominant
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predominant
 family structure, which increased to 35%, followed by the number of 2
people
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families
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, which was only 4% less than that. The number of 4
people
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households
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in households
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 remained
as
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apply
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the same as that in 1990, whilst the number of
people
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 living alone dropped significantly to 2% in 2000. In terms of 4
people
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 and
5
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5-people
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people
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households
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, it
tooks
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took
 up around 16%
among
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of
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 total
household
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households
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 in New Zealand.
Overall
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,
2 member
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2-member
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 and
3 member
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3-member
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families
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 were the most common
households
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 in 1990 and 2000, which occupied more than half of
the
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New Zealand
families
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, families, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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