Some people think all lawbreakers should be sent to prison, while others think there are better alternatives for those whose crimes are minor, such as making them do work for the local community. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to directly address the task prompt in your essay. The provided essay does not relate to the topic about lawbreakers and prison alternatives, therefore it does not properly task respond to the question.
Coherence & Cohesion
In your introduction, directly outline what the reader can expect from your essay. Since the essay you submitted did not match the given topic, aim to ensure that your introduction sets up a clear discussion related to the prompt.
Coherence & Cohesion
Maintain a clear, logical structure throughout your essay by having distinct paragraphs for each point of view and your own opinion, which again is related to the prompt given.
Coherence & Cohesion
Remember to conclude your essay with a summary of your main points and your final opinion, which must be pertinent to the essay prompt for a coherent closure.
Task Achievement
Use specific examples that demonstrate your points and relate them to the topic. In your response, consider including detailed reasons for why some people might favor prison or community work for lawbreakers, in line with the given prompt.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lawbreakers
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitation
  • community service
  • recidivism
  • incarceration
  • public safety
  • cost-effectiveness
  • infraction
  • reintegration
  • punitive measures
  • reoffending
  • stigmatization
  • educational programs
  • counseling programs
  • alternative approaches
  • societal benefits
  • burden on taxpayers
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