Some people think that the development of technology has made our life more complex, and the solution is tolive a life without that lechnology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, when a tendency for significant growth in technologies can be observed , some
people
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change complicates their lives. It is agreed, that the risk of
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negative effects cannot be denied ,
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development has completely revolutionized and simplified
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essay,
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, will discuss how
technology
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progress can hinder human activity, followed by an analysis of the main influences which highlight the importance of innovations.
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with, modern
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has an overwhelming impact on
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's ability to work,study and live their
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life
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. Undoubtedly, an overuse of each gadget will have
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adverse consequences,
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, not everything humanity is able to take under control.
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, the potential problem of replacing workers by using robots still exists and it does not
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to be far-fetched.
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, since
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evolves ,
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need to adapt regardless of their age.
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appearance of internal combustion engines leads to ecological destruction, which can destroy not only health
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the environment.
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,
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of various accessories gives humanity a unique opportunity to research new fields of
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, including medicine.
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,
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were able to adapt better to new circumstances.
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, innovations facilitate
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conditions ,
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, inventions for the performance of household duties, contribute to the realization of women in society.
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of planes and cars contributed to
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of the nature, which is important from the point of view of
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's safety. Nowadays, techniques
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out
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life
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giving us benefits
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as communication, safety and health care.
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essay supports the idea that the development of innovative devices has a high impact on our
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life
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,
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,
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definitely overweight
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the potential
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complications.
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task achievement
Try to ensure that your introduction includes a clear thesis statement that outlines the main argument of your essay. It was not clear whether you agree or disagree with the statement.
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Support each main point with relevant examples and explanations. Much of the discussion was abstract and could be substantiated with more specific details.
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more effectively by using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph, followed by supporting sentences and concluding sentences that tie back to your main argument.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to better connect your ideas and increase the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
In your conclusion, summarise your main points more effectively to create a strong final impression. Also, make sure your opinion is very clear in the conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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