The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007.
The line graph illustrates the intake of margarine, low fat and reduced spreads and
butter
between 1981 to
2007.
Correct word choice
and
Overall
, the consumption of butter
decreased dramatically over the years whereas
low fat
and reduced spreads were consumed increasingly. The intake Add a hyphen
low-fat
for
margarine dropped slightly as compared to the time when it first started in 1981.
Change preposition
of
Butter
started off at over 140 grains
in 1981 and peaked at around 160 grains
in 1986,
before it dropped significantly to Remove the comma
apply
the
lowest at around 50 Change the word
its
grains
in 2007. In contrast
, low fat and reduced spreads were only introduced in 1996. It showed a steep upward trend and overtook butter
after 1996. It then
reached its highest point at over 80 grains
in 2001, before starting to fall progressively to 70 grains
in 2007.
Margarine, on the other hand
, stood at 90 grains
in 1981. It fluctuated in the next 10 years and reached a plateau between 1991 to 1996. It subsequently
began to fall and dropped to its lowest at 40 grains
in 2007.Submitted by michellehoon0924 on
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