The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.

The chart below shows what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years.
The pie
chart
compares the percentage of individuals who are the graduation
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Anthropology from a common university in terms of employment. The table
chart
shows the rate of anthropologists' income after five years
work
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based on their
jobs'
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sectors.
Overall
, it can be seen that most of them can find
full time
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work
. Those
graduators
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who
work
in the government sector give more salaries in comparison with freelance consultants and private companies.
According to
the pie
chart
, more than half the
graduators
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have a full-time occupation. After
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the
most
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rate includes those who are employed as part-time workers at 15%. A negligible proportion of them
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5%, decided to continue their studies at
postgraduate
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level
as well as
work
temporarily and around a little under 10% of them study full-time postgraduate. Just over 10% of these anthropologists are unemployed. Looking at the table
chart
, 5% of anthropology graduations who give freelance consultants and
work
in the government sector have equal salaries between 25000$
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to
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50000$. 15% of these two groups earn at least 50000$ and
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almost
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75000$. Half the individuals who
work
for the state have the
most
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highest
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salary at 100000$
while
40% of freelancers have the same
earning
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. Private companies show a different pattern. the rate of people who give more than 75000$
are
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less
then
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those who earn between 50000
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750000$. Just around a third of
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who
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in private companies have more than 100000% income.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • anthropology graduates
  • undergraduate degree
  • part-time work
  • full-time work
  • postgraduate study
  • unemployment
  • career trends
  • employment opportunities
  • flexibility
  • specialization
  • competitive job market
  • salary
  • earning potential
  • private sector
  • government sector
  • freelance work
  • public policy
  • cultural preservation
  • consulting
  • corporate anthropology
  • expertise
  • accrued
  • distribution
  • sector
  • trend
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