SCHOOL TEACHERS USED TO BE THE SOURCE OF INFORMATION. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARUE THAT TEACHERS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT AS BEFORE AS THE INCREASING VARIETY OF INFORMATION RESOURCES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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years, academic instructors have been the most trusted place to earn
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, is it really relevant and justifiable nowadays? Some people
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that a self-study method is way more effective as plenty of resources on the
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developed rapidly over the past ten years. I personally argue that using
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would create more positive impacts rather than gaining
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by
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. First of all, it is a widely known fact that
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to achieve a high score and rank, the materials and teachers must be enjoyable for
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to study.
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outstanding surroundings in class, as we get plenty of friends. Despite the academic facilities that schools
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, the atmosphere of learning in class must
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convenience. Clearly, teachers
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learned
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before delivering the materials for
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to be more acceptable.
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with self-learning where there
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only a computer device and videos to understand, some people find it more comfortable to learn with
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as the source of information.
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, it is an
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argument that the existence of
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and artificial
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. Around approximately 80%
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in every country use the help of Open AI, Chat GPT, or any other applications. Apparently, AI and
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base
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are seen to be more useful because of
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quick response and accuracy. There
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also
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tons of videos, journals, articles,
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even digital books that are
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accessible
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why most
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students
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decided to do self-study by gaining tons of insights from the
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rather than hiring a teacher. Since it is cheaper and
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affordable prices,
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are allowed to explore as much as they want. All in all, in spite of the class environment that makes
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feel comfortable, the advantages of
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resources still outweigh the teacher's capabilities. I certainly believe as the development of
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increase
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year by year, we can
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maximize
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human resources by educating
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through it
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monitoring the systems to be safely used by
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