Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is believed by some that
success
can be achieved by hard work
and determination
, whereas
others say that money
and good looks can lead to success
. This
essay will discuss both these views. I personally believe that more often success
comes from hard work
and perseverance and only on some odd occasion
Fix the agreement mistake
occasions
money
and looks Add a missing verb
do money
can
play a role.
The main reason why some people say that Verb problem
apply
determination
and hard work
is
an important Verb problem
apply
prerequisite
for Fix the agreement mistake
prerequisites
success
,
is that Remove the comma
apply
determination
gives people an impetus of setting
up goals, which lead to Change preposition
to set
success
. For example
, Marie Curie (Madame Curie) determined to finish her husband’s lifetime unfinished work
after his death and eventually discovered radium. Similarly
, hard work
is also
very important as without hard work
determination
is of no value. It has been well said that ‘Genius is one percent
inspiration and ninety-nine Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, perspiration’. Take the example of businessmen. Only those Change the spelling
per cent
succeed
who have Correct pronoun usage
who succeed
determination
and who put in a lot of sweat and toil Add an article
the determination
in
their business.
Those who advocate that Change preposition
into
money
and good looks are needed for success
, believe that good looks increase the confidence of a person
and a
confident Correct word choice
that a
person
has more chances to succeed in his life. With good looks a person
can succeed in the acting and modelling fields. They also
opine that money
is needed to become an entrepreneur and those who have the capital to invest have more chances to succeed. For example
, a person
with lots of bank balance may sustain through any ups and downs in business and finally
succeed, but any person
without any financial backing may break down if his business goes through a bad phase.
To sum up
, I believe that success
depends on how firmly people hold on to their determination
and how much effort they put into their work
. A powerful background of money
as well as
attractive looks can help a certain number of persons
to succeed, but too much reliance on these is Replace the word
people
unpractical
.Replace the word
impractical
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