Some people believe that success in life depends on hard work and determination, while others believe that other factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some that

success

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can be achieved by hard

work

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and

determination

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whereas

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others say that

money

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and good looks can lead to

success

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This

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essay will discuss both these views. I personally believe that more often

success

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comes from hard

work

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and perseverance and only on some odd

occasion

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occasions

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money

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do money

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and looks

can

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apply

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play a role. The main reason why some people say that

determination

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and hard

work

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apply

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an important

prerequisite

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prerequisites

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for

success

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apply

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is that

determination

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gives people an impetus

of setting

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to set

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up goals, which lead to

success

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, Marie Curie (Madame Curie) determined to finish her husband’s lifetime unfinished

work

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after his death and eventually discovered radium.

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, hard

work

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also

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very important as without hard

work

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determination

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is of no value. It has been well said that ‘Genius is one

percent

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per cent

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inspiration and ninety-nine

percent

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per cent

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, perspiration’. Take the example of businessmen. Only those

succeed

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who succeed

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who have

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determination

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the determination

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and who put in a lot of sweat and toil

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into

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their business. Those who advocate that

money

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and good looks are needed for

success

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, believe that good looks increase the confidence of a

person

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and

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that a

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confident

person

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has more chances to succeed in his life. With good looks a

person

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can succeed in the acting and modelling fields. They

also

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opine that

money

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is needed to become an entrepreneur and those who have the capital to invest have more chances to succeed.

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, a

person

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with lots of bank balance may sustain through any ups and downs in business and

finally

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succeed, but any

person

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without any financial backing may break down if his business goes through a bad phase.

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, I believe that

success

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depends on how firmly people hold on to their

determination

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and how much effort they put into their

work

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. A powerful background of

money

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as well as

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attractive looks can help a certain number of

persons

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people

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to succeed, but too much reliance on these is

unpractical

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impractical

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Ensure a clear thesis statement that directly addresses the prompt in your introduction to guide the reader.

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Expand on your conclusion by synthesizing the discussion points more effectively and projecting forward, if possible.

coherence and cohesion

To improve coherence, use a wider range of cohesive devices to create smoother transitions between ideas.

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To support your main points more effectively, provide more detailed examples that are directly relevant to the prompt.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

332 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

perseverance
discipline
resilience
effort
tenacity
external factors
financial resources
favorable appearance
perceptions
advantages
intrinsic
extrinsic
sustainable
facilitating
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