Some people think that the best way to learn is from a newspaper. Others think that the best way to learn is through media. Discuss each views and your opinion.

Information
is spread across both through
newspapers
and the
media
and the best source of
information
to learn is subjective. Within
this
essay
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I will be discussing both aspects and give my opinion. On one
hand
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hand,
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newspapers
have been used for centuries,
way
before technology allowing people from all backgrounds and ages to obtain
information
, without having to actively search.
For instance
, the older generation will always prefer
newspapers
as it's easily available in every corner
shops
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as well as
public
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transport, essentially allowing people to read on the go without technological difficulties. Ultimately
newspapers
are widely scattered so easy to obtain
aswell
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as well
as being easily accessed without being forced to have
the
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comprehension on technological devices.
On the other hand
,
media
can be used more efficiently allowing the younger generation to be exposed to news
which
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they
otherwise
wouldn't have access to. Teenagers don't often pick up physical copies of the newspaper but
instead
often get
information
from social
media
such
as TikTok.
For instance
,
according to
Techbase, a research company, it's estimated that 75% of
under
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those under
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30 use social
media
as their primary
information
source.
This
may be
due to
the fact it's much faster to get
specific
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the specific
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information
you are looking for through short TikTok videos.
This
further
implies that technology is advancing and people have a tendency to develop with time and prefer social
media
to get their
information
from. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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although
newspapers
are an efficient
way
to receive
information
as it's readily available in different locations and
doesn't
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requires
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technology proficiency, the world is advancing including the
way
we receive
information
.
Media
is an efficient
way
to obtain
information
fast.
Personally
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I believe that
information
by
media
is more practical, providing educational videos through a fun platform. In order to allow all ages to access
internet
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the internet
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I suggest free
media
classes for
over
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those over
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40's
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, enabling them to access the internet easily too.
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task achievement
Balance the discussion of both views before stating your opinion. Ensure that each viewpoint is given approximately equal attention to fully address the essay prompt.

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