the map show school map in 1985 & now. describe it

the map show school map in 1985 & now. describe it
This
map illustrates the changes that have taken
places
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place
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in a
school
, showing the difference
of
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between
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a
school
in 1985 and
present
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the present
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. First and foremost, the
school
in 1985 had a total population of 1,500 people. Nowadays, the
school
have 2,500 people in total. There used to be a bigger parking lot for
car
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cars
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in 1985 compared to what they have now.
However
, the
school
have more
classrom
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classroom
space now compared to
the
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1985 with only 2 storeys. Meanwhile, the
school
now have
classroom
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a classroom
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block with 3 storeys more classroom space nearby. Based on the image, it is shown that the resource centre and computer room they have now was originally a library in 1985.
Although
the library has changed, the office near it remains the same. Moving on to the
sport
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area, the
school
in 1985 had a larger field than it is now.
However
, the
school
in the present time have
pool
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a pool
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and and fitness centre, which are facilities that did not exist back in 1985.
Overall
, the
school
nowadays have better facilities and
larger
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a larger
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population
that
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than
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it was.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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