The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and

amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between

1920 and 2019.
The line charts illustrate the differences between
housework
time spent and ownership of electrical appliances in a country from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
, the relationship between electrical appliances and the number of
housework
is backwards. It is clearly seen that three electronics
such
as washing
machine
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machines
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,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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, and vacuum
cleaner
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were low
that
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started
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at 0
until
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40 percent in 1920 and
peaked
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in 2019 approximately at 65 to 100.
While the
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number of
housework
per hour in 1920 was at the maximum number that hit 50
hours
and it was lowest in 2019
that
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reached
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10
hours
. The data reveals that the percentage
from
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electrical appliances started to rise gradually, except
washing
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for washing
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machines, which
were
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slightly down in 1980, but went back up in 2000.
However
, the total
hours
from
housework
per household in a week were gently decreased until in 2019 the lowest point was at 10
hours
per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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