Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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few decades, individuals trained with professional skills
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and engineering
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offered
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broad opportunities to
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outside their
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professional workers. Many believe that those people need to be encouraged to take the offer,
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others oppose
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view. As for my personal perspective, I believe that every individual should not
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overseas. On the one hand, it is believed that working abroad will boost the chance of career promotion,
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at the same time will broaden
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and skills significantly.
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, doctors who decide to
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in
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with severe medical issues
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as Burundi and Ethiopia might experience handling patients with rare
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which have never been found in their own
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opportunity will lead to
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new knowledge, which can be implemented once they are back.
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, the majority of
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of specialized institutions are programmed to be only suitable in the
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where it was established.
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decision is taken
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the different
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and
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in each country. As an example,
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an engineer
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who pursued
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in Germany might find it hard to
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in Indonesia, as the geographical condition of both
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differs
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each other.
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, some people strongly believe that staying
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where they received their degrees
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is a more proper decision to make.
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, both decisions have its own advantages and disadvantages.
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, I strongly agree that unless there is
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unavoidable emergence, those professional workers
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to
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in
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where their institutions are located.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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