Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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past
few decades, individuals trained with professional skills Correct article usage
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such
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and engineering Replace the word
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a
broad opportunities to Correct the article-noun agreement
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work
outside their countries
, due to
the continually-surging
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continually surging
of
professional workers. Many believe that those people need to be encouraged to take the offer, Change preposition
for
while
others oppose this
view. As for my personal perspective, I believe that every individual should not work
overseas.
On the one hand, it is believed that working abroad will boost the chance of career promotion, while
at the same time will broaden knowledges
and skills significantly. Change the wording
knowledge
pieces of knowledge
bits of knowledge
For instance
, doctors who decide to work
in country
with severe medical issues Fix the agreement mistake
countries
such
as Burundi and Ethiopia might experience handling patients with rare disease
which have never been found in their own Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
countries
. Therefore
, this
opportunity will lead to a
new knowledge, which can be implemented once they are back.
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On the other hand
, the majority of curriculum
of specialized institutions are programmed to be only suitable in the Fix the agreement mistake
curricula
countries
where it was established. This
decision is taken due to
the different situation
and Fix the agreement mistake
situations
condition
in each country. As an example, Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
engineer
who pursued Add an article
an engineer
the engineer
degree
in Germany might find it hard to Add an article
a degree
work
in Indonesia, as the geographical condition of both countries
differs to
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Thus
, some people strongly believe that staying in
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from
is a more proper decision to make.
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To sum up
, both decisions have its own advantages and disadvantages. However
, I strongly agree that unless there is a
unavoidable emergence, those professional workers Change the article
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prefer
work
in
where their institutions are located.Change preposition
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