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the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

the map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
#developments #place #bookstore
The plans show the
infastructure
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infrastructure
 of a bookstore in 2000 and its current status.
Overall
, It can be noticeable that a significant development in the bookstore since 2000.
According to
 the current plan it includes a cafe and others
has
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 been relocated to different areas. In 2000,
fiction
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the fiction
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 books area was located
at
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north
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 which has been replaced by four sections;art,hobbies,cookery, and
fiction
 which were at the
center
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 of
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 .
And
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also
, there
were
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 another
fiction
 section
at
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in
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 the
North
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Northeast
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 east which
also
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was also
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 replaced by
non fictions
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non-fiction
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 books.
Furthermore
,
on
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 the
center
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, art, hobbies and cookery books
was
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 located in 2000, but that location is allocated for a reference area with tables and chairs. It can be seen that the place where
non
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fiction
 section was located in 2000 , has been replaced by a cafe. Travel and new book area has not been changed over the years and entrance
also
 remains unchanged.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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