*Living in a country* where you have to *speak a foreign language* can cause *serious social problems*, as well as practical problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

Nowadays, it has become
trend
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to move
into
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another country after
completed
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high education
however
, living
into
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nation
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a nation
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where
people
have to speak
international
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an international
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language
,
faced
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nember of issues like
home-sickness
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home sickness
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, communication
probelm
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problems
problem
and many
other
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others
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which I will explain in
further
paragraphs. I agree with
this
statement . As
,
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shifting into
unknown
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place is always difficult
people
have to handle
majority
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the majority
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of things like
language
which plays a major role in
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because they
must
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need to interact with other
people
for the
base
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things with your neighbors even when they
seach
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search
for
job
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the job
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, the interview is
also
held in new country
language
.
Hence
, whenever
people
want to change their living area
then
they should think of languages
the
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foreign languages to
makes
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the
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life easy over there. Despite these
language
barriers, there
are
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also
homesickness as
live
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without their parents , friends and roots is really challenging for every single citizen because in different countries they cannot get their home food and local street food, in
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, they have to make new
habit
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habits
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relate to foreign food.
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Meanwhile
,
people
have to learn about their culture and traditions so that they can easily adjust themselves
into
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new customers
otherwise
, they are unable to become
the
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part of their
celebration
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celebrations
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and
culture
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events. In conclusion,
although
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the nation is good for distinct
life style
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lifestyles
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and
experience
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experiences
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nonetheless
, I believe one should learn their
language
, culture, traditions and so on
instead
then
faced
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problem
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problems
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while
living over there.
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