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Many criminals re-offend after they have been punished. punished, and what measures can be taken to tackle this problem

#criminals #re-offend #measures
Nowadays,there are many types of criminals in society,and some robbers
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re-offened
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re-offended
re-offered
 when they have been punished. Because,l think,
yhey
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they
 get used to stealing l am going to explain about
this
 topic during the essay. Looking at several problems one of the most
notice cominal
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due
to
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burglary,
mugger
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 and others.
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,
This robbers
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 always
re-offened
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re-offended
re-offered
re-offend
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firstly
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 reason
of
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this
,
l
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think that it needs so much money to them.Because
,
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majority
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 of them
is
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 poorer than other people.
Also
 ,the reason
of
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stealing
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the stealing
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 of robbers can not
only
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.There are many reasons
of
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these
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. There are many solutions for decreasing crimes.
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 as
,
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it must not pardon criminals.
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, if
criminal
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the criminal
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 is not pardoned by
government
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the government
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,
this
 will cause
very
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 bad situation.
Also
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 many people think that they are
remited
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remitted
 when
criminers
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criminals
 follow disciplines and it has to do
this
 is that arresting criminals is be penalty very easy for
robber
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robbers
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 today. So they need to punish hardly. In conclusion, some people continue to commit crimes after they have
punished
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been punished
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. I hope that the government can solve for prevention of stealing
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