Some people think that girls should take husband’s name after marriage while others feel that they should not follow this age old tradition. What is your opinion?

Whether a
women
keep their
name
or partner's
name
after
marriage
is a matter of personal
prefferences
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preferences
preference
. Few individuals believe that after
marriage
women
should take their
spouse
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name
and others think that no need to stick to the ancient custom. In
this
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i
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I
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would like to explain why
i
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believe it is not necessary to change the
name
after
marriage
. First of all,the
name
is considered
as
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the main
identity
of a human being.
Usually
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immediately after
birth
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of a baby,the parents give him or her a
name
and surname, most of the time
that is
their
parents
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parent's
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name
. Culturally accepting the husband"
s
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's
name
was connected to the notions of ownership,
women
once belonged to their
father
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fathers
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and
then
their
husband
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husbands
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.
For instance
, in
India
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most of the ladies change their surnames immediately after
marriage
, and they start knowing by their partner's
name
. Generally in
ancient
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era husbands were the earning member of
a
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family and the
womens
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women's
women
restricted
in
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to
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their
home
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and taking care of
othher
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other
members, and she was totally
depend
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on
her
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their
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better
half
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.
that
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time it was a tradition or custom that
women
must
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identify
indentify
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identify
by
her
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their
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partner's
name
Despite a growing
feminism
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movement and increased gender equality
concept
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concepts
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, the commonness of
this
practice remains the same. Nowadays most
of
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the
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girls are
independant
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independent
in their profession
as well as
financial stability,
think
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that they
are having
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a
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freedom
of selecting
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to select
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their names and
identity
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identities
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by themselves. These days the concept of gender equality is incredibly increasing in our society. In my opinion ,the
name
is
an
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the
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identity
of an individual and there is no need to change their
identity
of
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or
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anything
untill
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until
they wish to do so.
Moreover
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there is no difference between male and female in our society. Every
adults
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should right to have their own
identity
and more than that no need to
concern
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so much about the names as the individual and character
remains
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remain
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the same.
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