The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the frequency of
trips
made by kids ages 5-12 in a certain country between 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from the place where they study, and the variety of
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transport options that they take.
Overall
, the main mode of transport changed, from walking in 1990 to using a car in 2010. The number of children that used a bike, a
bus
, and a combination of walking and
bus
all dropped in 2010. In 1990, walking was the top choice of transport for children with over 12
million
trips
taken. In comparison, using a private vehicle
such
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cars
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is not as popular, with just around 4
million
trips
.
This
changed drastically in 2010, with an extra addition of around 7
million
trips
, making the number of car
trips
around 11
million
in 2010. Even
then
, walking is still the second most popular
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with 6
million
trips
of walking to and from school. Cycling,
bus
,
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and a combination of walking and
bus
are all generally of the same popularity, with taking a
bus
being in the lead with around 7
million
trips
. The number of
trips
for all three dropped in 2010, with the most noticeable decrease in cycling, from just over 6
million
in 1990 to 2
million
in 2010. Even though not as drastic, a similar case can be seen for the combination of
bus
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and walks, going down around half from just under 6
million
in 1990 to roughly 3
million
. The decrease
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bus
usage is not as drastic, just dropping from roughly 7
million
to about 5
million
in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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