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The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the frequency of
trips
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 made by kids ages 5-12 in a certain country between 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from the place where they study, and the variety of
the
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transport options that they take.
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, the main mode of transport changed, from walking in 1990 to using a car in 2010. The number of children that used a bike, a
bus
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, and a combination of walking and
bus
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 all dropped in 2010. In 1990, walking was the top choice of transport for children with over 12
million
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trips
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 taken. In comparison, using a private vehicle
such
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 as
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a cars
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cars
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car
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 is not as popular, with just around 4
million
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trips
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.
This
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 changed drastically in 2010, with an extra addition of around 7
million
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trips
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, making the number of car
trips
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 around 11
million
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 in 2010. Even
then
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, walking is still the second most popular
options
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 with 6
million
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trips
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 of walking to and from school. Cycling,
bus
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,
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 and a combination of walking and
bus
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 are all generally of the same popularity, with taking a
bus
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 being in the lead with around 7
million
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trips
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. The number of
trips
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 for all three dropped in 2010, with the most noticeable decrease in cycling, from just over 6
million
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 in 1990 to 2
million
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 in 2010. Even though not as drastic, a similar case can be seen for the combination of
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bus
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buses
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 and walks, going down around half from just under 6
million
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 in 1990 to roughly 3
million
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. The decrease
of
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bus
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 usage is not as drastic, just dropping from roughly 7
million
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 to about 5
million
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 in 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, bus, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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