The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
The chart illustrates the results of a survey conducted in five Australian Cities about the citizen’s
coffee
and tea buying and drinking habits in the past 4 weeks. It can be seen that there was a dynamic fluctuation in both trends of purchasing fresh
coffee
and
instant
coffee
in all five Australian cities, continued with the instability of people’s conscious willingness to go to a cafe for both beverages
also
. Conclusions can be drawn that
instant
coffee
has always been everyone’s choice in the past 4 weeks, proven by how these
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caffeine trends were popular from
Sydney
to Hobart.
However
,
residents
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choice
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choices
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of fresh
coffee
and
instant
coffee
are similar in
Sydney
and Melbourne with
each
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gap
roughly
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3% for
Sydney
and 5% for Melbourne. The same pattern happened in Brisbane and Adelaide where both of these towns show almost the same level of
gap
between fresh
coffee
and
instant
coffee
enthusiasts, with
18
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%
gap
for Brisbane and
16
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%
gap
for Adelaide. In general, among all of the 4 areas, Hobart indicates the highest trend
on
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instant
coffee
. As we continue to the trends of inhabitant’s
behavior
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on purchasing
coffee
and tea to the cafe, Melbourne and Hobart share the same amount of percentage that represents the highest interest
of
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cafe
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with 63% in the
last
4 weeks, followed by
Sydney
as the
runner up
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with 52% of its citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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