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pie charts below show the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular UK University in 1987 and 2007.

#show #students #study #uk #university
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information
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 which led
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pupils
 to study at the
UK
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University
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 in 1987 and 2007.
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majoraty
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majority
 of students studied at
the
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Uk
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UK
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University
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Universities
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beacuse
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because
 they found Suitable degree
couruses
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courses
. As we can
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,
that
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in 1987
the
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Suitable degree
couruses
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courses
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was
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 the most significant
reasons
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reason
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 for studying at
the
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a
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Uk
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UK university
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University
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 . It was around 35./. and it still
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had the highest percentage in 2007
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for 37./
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Quality
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The quality
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 of
resource
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resources
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 was the second
popular
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most popular
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 reason for
studing
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studying
 at
this
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University
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 . It was about 21./. in 1987 but it went down to 17./. in 2007.
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 2007, Close to parental was the second reason had the highest ratio after Quality of
resource
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resources
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 around 22./.
compsring
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comparing
 in 1987 was only 10./
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 It is
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 to notice that in 1987 it was 19./. of students
studied
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 at the
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Uk
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UK
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university
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beacuse
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because
 it had Good sports and social activities but in 2007 decreased sharply
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to 6./. If we compare
between
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the percentage of
the
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apply
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students who want to study at
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Uk
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UK
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University
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beacuse
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because
 of the Quality of teaching it was highest in 1987 than
2007
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 about 15./. compared to only 8./. in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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