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The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of main fuels in a European country from 1981 to 2000.
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The line graph describes the production of three different fossil fuels in an unknown country in the whole
period
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 between 1981 and 2000
Overall
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,
the
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apply
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petroleum
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always
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 at the top of
productions
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production
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 levels.
Petroleum
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 and coal followed
an
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apply
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eratic
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erratic
 developments. Looking at the graph,
Petroleum
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 was constantly the prevalent fuel used in production .
Athough
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Although
 there were many
oscillation
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 in
manufacture
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 levels. At the beginning of the
period
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, the number of
tonnes
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 of
petroleum
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 increased significantly from nearly 100 to over 120.
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, from 1987 there was a noteworthy fall in
petroleum
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,
in particular
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 nearly 90 in 1991. In the rest of the
period
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 between 1992 and 2000, the aforementioned
firgue
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figure
fire
 went up remarkably, up to over 130
tonnes
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 of
petroleum
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.
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, the amount of natural gas remained unchanged at 40
tonnes
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 until 1994, there was a rapid rise, up to over 80
tonnes
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 in 2000.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,
stability
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the stability
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 of coal remained at 80
tonnes
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 until 1984,
the
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when the
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 huge amount of coal dropped significantly. after that, from 1987 to the rest of the
period
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,
the
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a
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 slight decrease
of
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 the consumption of coal still happened.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, petroleum, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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