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The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagrams show the structure of solar panel and its use. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given diagram
represent
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represents
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 the structure of a solar panel to heat
water
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 and wind.
Overall
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, there are two different diagrams involving a series of steps beginning from the inlet of cool
air
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/
water
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 in and terminating with the outlet of warm
air
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/
water
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 out.
To begin
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 with, the top of the
box
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 is covered by transparent glass so it will obtain direct sunlight. There are two demonstrations: solar panels to hot wind and solar panels to hot liquid.
Firstly
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, cold
air
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 is collected in a
box
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 with the help of
inlet
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an inlet
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 and
due to
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 direct sun rays cold wind is transferred to hot
air
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 and it gets out through the outlet.
Secondly
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, the same concept is followed for hot liqued but there is one change, in a
box
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water
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 pipe is located from which cold
water
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 is transferred to hot
water
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 with the help of direct heat energy which are hitting in the transparent top of the
box
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.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, air, box with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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