Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days, there has been a dramatic increase in the

number

of researches about the methods to improve public health. Some people believe that the effective way is to increase the

number

of sports facilities,

while

others feel that

this

has little effect and other things should be involved. In

this

essay, both views will be discussed with examples. One of the main reasons which cause some individuals to think that more sports amenities would help

this

is that it would encourage them to do workouts.

This

means that if you see someone who is working out in

park

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, you will be motivated to persuade him.

As a consequence

, the

number

of these humans will

raise

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rise

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day by day.

Moreover

, They feel that high prices of these machines,

less

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fewer

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humans would have an opportunity to

workout

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work

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.

As a result

, more facilities would decrease the prices, which

enables

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poorer individuals to do

exercises

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exercise

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.

On the other hand

, others argue that

this

method would not be effective enough, and other options are required. They feel that

although

doing exercises can be helpful, it can not prevent some from smoking. To tackle

this

,the government should ban people from smoking in public locations, which would decrease the

number

of smokers and it would be a great contributor.

In addition

, They feel that a healthy diet can play an important role in

this

. So, the government should raise the tax on junk food.

As a result

, fewer people might face obesity and deal with other diseases.

For instance

, in Iran, these kinds of food are pricy, and the statistic illustrates that only 30 per cent of the society

tend

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to purchase them. In conclusion, there are arguments about how to help public health get better. Some believe there should be more sports amenities,

however

, others think there are other ways. I tend to agree with the second idea, and in my opinion,

instead

of concentrating on one factor, we should think about more options,

such

as decreasing the

number

of smokers.