The graph below shows the number ofshops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
The graph illustrates the number of
stores
that bankrupt and the count of new shops
that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that 2011 was the highest year
of massive opening stores
, and 2018 was the lowest Change preposition
of stores
year
throughout the year
. Meanwhile, for the closures of shops
, 2013 was the most frequent time stores
closed.
To begin
with, 2011 was the best year
for new shops
, there were successfully 8500 stores
opening. Moreover
, this
number fell in 2012, with only 4000 opened, and the rest of it faced a fluctuative
rate until 2018.
Correct your spelling
fluctuating
On the other hand
, at the beginning of 2011, there were 6500 units that failed and led to close. In 2013 the worst thing happened with 7100 shops
shutting down their operation. Fortunately
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Fortunately,
this
number decreased significantly in 2015, but the condition started to rise again in 2016 to 2018.Submitted by zefanyagyu on
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