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Band 5

To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, in the modern era, technology has developed significantly, making our lives extremely easier, more enjoyable and full of opportunities provided by useful gadgets. From my point of view,
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internet
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, which came
along with
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 the growth of technology, has made our lives much more convenient,
ensuring
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providing
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 us
a
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with a
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lot of benefits and
accessibilities
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accessibility
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. In the following, I will try to outline some key reasons for
this
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 idea. First and foremost,
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internet
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 is a big part
in
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 our daily routine
,
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 everyone
using
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uses
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 it constantly. Work, school or even simple activities
,
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apply
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 all require the
utilization
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 of the
internet
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. The online sources, applications and the variety of news that exist on social apps, all of these can provide someone with pieces of information, useful content and new ideas. A case in point is the new AI robot- Chat GPT that helps students all around the world with their homework and school tasks, by pitching innovative ideas, starting points or even whole texts and essays written accurately.
Secondly
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, having access to
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internet
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 means having access to new interactions and relationships. Social media has become very trendy in
the
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last
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 years
enabling
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 us to form connections with others, communicate through different platforms and share experiences with friends.
For instance
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, apps
as
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 Viber, Instagram and Facebook allow us to send messages to each other, post all
sort
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 of photos and videos and form new relationships with new people met online. In conclusion,
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internet
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the internet
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 has a huge impact on our daily activities, making life much more convenient and accessible. By helping us, by promoting ideas and providing useful information,
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internet
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the internet
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 has acquired all our attention and time.

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Say your answer more clearly in the first part. Use words like 'I agree to a large extent' so your main idea is easy to see.
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Add one more main idea, such as online shopping, banking, or map apps, to make your answer more full.
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Explain your examples more. Show exactly how ChatGPT or social media makes life easier, saves time, or cuts cost.
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Be careful: some points are about the internet in general, but the question asks how far it makes life more convenient. Keep linking each point to convenience.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this shape in future essays.
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Use linking words with more care. Some are good, but too many can sound forced. Keep them simple and natural.
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Some sentences are long and a bit hard to follow. Break them into shorter parts for better flow.
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Make each body part start with one clear main point, then add support and one example.
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You answer the question and stay on the topic of the internet and daily life.
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You give two clear ideas: getting information and making contact with people.
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You use examples like ChatGPT, Viber, Instagram, and Facebook to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction, two body parts, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Words like 'First and foremost', 'Secondly', and 'In conclusion' help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is easy to understand.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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