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Band 5

To what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

The
internet
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 has reshaped
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modern society by accelerating our everyday rhythm of life.
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made some aspects easier, though some challenges remain.
Firstly
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, the
internet
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 is now the main way of communication between people, a reality that
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 been hard to imagine for previous generations who had been forced to make a significant effort in order to deliver a message.
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, it
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 an enormous amount of information and knowledge on diverse topics, shared on platforms which can be easily accessed by anyone. The research one should have previously done in order to investigate a specific question, using the limited sources that a library offered, is now completed within minutes.
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, with the revolution of Artificial Intelligence that was integrated in the search engine of any existing browser, it not only presents the required details but is
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 capable
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 the data,
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 predictions and
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 useful resources.
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 my opinion, the most significant consequence
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 the integration of
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internet
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the internet
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 in out daily life is the
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time-saving
 component, as many routine tasks can be rapidly completed within seconds
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 paying the bills or sending a message to a loved one. Personally, I rely on online merchants, especially those selling clothing and cosmetic products, as it simplifies the process and saves time that can be
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 on more important activities.
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, the partial transition to an online way of living is demonstrating some serious consequences
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 affecting people’s mental health.
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, children can be easily influenced by any sort of content shared on the
internet
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, which can become a
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 considering the algorithms that
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are built
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 to deliver the desired information. In
this
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 way, the government should revise the existing policies and come up with solutions that would protect the final consumer. In conclusion, the
internet
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 has made life more convenient by improving communication and access to services. It is essential
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 balance its use in order to not
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 the connection with reality.

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Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how far you agree that the internet makes life easier.
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Add one more clear example to support your main ideas. This will make your answer stronger.
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Explain the bad side in a way that still links to convenience. Now this part moves a little away from the main question.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Some ideas are long and hard to follow. Break long sentences into shorter ones.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, and however.
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You give a clear main view: the internet makes life easier, but there are still some problems.
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You include real examples such as paying bills, sending messages, and online shopping.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear beginning, two body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You group similar ideas together, such as communication, information, and daily tasks.
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