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A lot of money is spent repairing old buildings. Instead of repairing these buildings, they should be knocked down and replaced with new ones. Do you agree or disagree?

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The price of
reparing
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repairing
preparing
 some ancient
buildings
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are
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is
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 extravagant. It is more proper to
demolished
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demolish
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 these
buildings
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 and replace them with modern
buildings
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.
This
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esay
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essay
 will discuss the reasons.
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 with, properly maintained
buildings
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 do not require a lot of money to
repair
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.
Buildings
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that required
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required
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 a load of money to
repair
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 are not cultural heritages, but catastrophes-in-waitings. Old
buildings
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 that seek
repairing
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repair
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 often
brings
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bring
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 a lot of problems. Sometimes these problems are vital,
such
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 as the structures. To
repair
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such
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 problems, documents required for the
repair
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 that contain the building information are lost, or inaccurate, making them impossible to refurbish.
To solve
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such
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 an inaccurate problem is an enormous risk. A risk that
easily
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is easily
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 eliminated by demolishing and rebuilding
in
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at
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 a fraction of the price. Old
buildings
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 were
also
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 built under old
safety
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 regulations. In an ideal situation, dated
buildings
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 should refurbished to current
safety
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 standards.
However
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, these are not possible because of many
safety
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 aspects
are
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apply
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in the structure of the building,
for example
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, a fire escape, cannot be corrected unless to
rebuild
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rebuilt
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. We should not trade our nostalgic feelings for dated
building
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buildings
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 with our
safety
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. All in all, I encourage that
instead
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 of
reparing
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repairing
preparing
 old
buildings
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, they should be knocked down and
re-builted
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rebuilt
 with
the
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a
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 fraction of the money for the
safety
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 and efficiency of our society.
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coherence cohesion
Work on constructing clear topic sentences that introduce the main points of each paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each body paragraph expands on the topic sentence with supporting details and examples.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices, such as linking words and phrases, to better connect your ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Address both sides of the argument to fully meet the requirements of the task, showing your ability to discuss and contrast different views.
task achievement
Use specific examples to support your arguments, providing concrete illustrations of your points.
overall
Review grammar and vocabulary for accuracy to convey your ideas more precisely.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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