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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map illustrates two probable sites for a new shopping
center
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 in
the
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Brandfield
city
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.
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, we can assess the two locations in terms of their distance from
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the residental
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residental
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residential
 area and whether they are close to the road or rail. As can be seen, S1 is somewhere between
city
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center
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 and
housing
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the housing
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 area along the river ,
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 S2, where is far from
housing
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the housing
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 areas and
river
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 near the industrial area.
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, it is more accessible for citizens to get to S1 for shopping.
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 evident is,
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 S1 is as far from the golf
center
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 and park as S2, they are both along the rail
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 and road, in
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residentce
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residence
residents
 are able to get to both sites by car and railway.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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