The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.
The four pie charts
illustrates
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the proportions of tourists visited from four various countries to
Australia
and
Germany
in the years of 1960 to 2010.
Overall
,
according to
the pie charts,
Europeans
were an affirmative in both countries,
whereas
Asians were a significant
visitors
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to
Australia
in 2010,
Europeans
remained leading places in
Germany
after fifty years. It is clearly seen that, in 1960 the
most
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number of
Europeans
to
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Australia
were
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with
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53% and
to
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Germany
45% respectively. The British were the second top comers to
Australia
, with a quarter of the proportion, which is exactly the same as the USA
travelers
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in
Germany
.
Nevertheless
,
Germany
had 20% of
tourists
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,
10
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and 10
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%
of
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was
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Asians. The charts suggest that, in 50 year period Asians regulated all other communities in
Australia
, which made up 63%,
whereas
Europeans
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proportions took a sharp nosedive from 53% to 10%, which was the epic downfall in 2010.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, germany, europeans with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
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