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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.

The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period.
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The chart below demonstrates the planned expenses
the
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for the
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 following five years in American dollars for three surrounding
scheme
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 for durable forestry.The pie chart illustrates the predicted expenditure breakdown distribution for the first time as the
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projects
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project
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 is
establish
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.As can be seen from
table
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,all schemes are going to be decreased,
but
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except for
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia which will
be started
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 to increase after
second
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year
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.It is clear from
pie
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the pie
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 chart that salaries will take more spending than
other
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the other
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 three
projects
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,with
massive
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 fifty per cent.In
first
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year
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, all
project
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projects
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 will have spent total of 60.5
million
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 dollars and that
mean
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first
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the first
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year
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gonna
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 be
most
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the most
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 spent
year
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.
South-east
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Southeast
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 Asia is
only
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the only
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 one which will have spent 20
million
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over
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apply
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each
year
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,than other two
projects
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which
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will have spent under 20
million
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.
By contrast
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, the years for
three
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projects
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 include roughly equal costing over from
the
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year
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 4 and
year
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 5: 57.5
million
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 and 58.5 dollars.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words projects, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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