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The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.

The graph shows data on the manufacture of passenger cars in 2015.
The pie chart provides information on the manufacture of
passenger
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 cars in the year
of
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2015.
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, more than
the
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half of the
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world
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passenger
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car
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production
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 was produced by Greater China and Europe. As can clearly be seen, the percentages of the
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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 in Greater China and Europe were pretty similar accounting for 25 and 26 per
cent
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 respectively. North America produced 19 per
cent
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 of the
world
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's
passenger
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car
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production
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, meanwhile, Japan and Korea produced 16 per
cent
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 of the
world
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's
passenger
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car
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production
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. South Asia produced 8 per
cent
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 of the
world
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's
passenger
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car
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production
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 which was twice less than
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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 in Japan and Korea. The proportion of
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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 in South America was 4 per
cent
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 which was twice
than
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the percentage of
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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 in
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 East and Africa which was 2 per
cent
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. In 2015, Greater
Chine
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China
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 had the highest rate of
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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,
while
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 East and Africa had the lowest rate of
world
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passenger
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car
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production
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Vocabulary: Replace the words passenger, world, car, production, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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