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The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line graph compares the information of two distinct
music
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 sites in terms of visiting during the 15-day period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 both sites fluctuated rapidly from the beginning to the end.
Besides
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 most
days
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, the figure for
visitors
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 to Pop Parada was more than
Music
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 choice. For the first 9
days
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, there was a significant decrease in the proportion of viewers to Pop Parada sites, which fell from about 120,000
visitors
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 to 40,00
visitors
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.
However
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, For the next two
days
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, the figure witnessed a rapid growth at around 150,000. In the 12th and 13th, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 went down dramatically. The
number
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 for the former was about 81,000 and just 80,000 for the latter. In the end, it reached its peak during the 15-day period, which was around 170,000
visitors
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. Meanwhile, In the following 11
days
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,
visitors
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 to
Music
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 Choice varied slightly it is obvious it remained above 20,000
visitors
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. During the next 3
days
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 experienced an upward trend to the highest level at approximately 120,000 viewers.
By contrast
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, on the
last
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 day, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to
Music
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 Choice decreases rapidly by over 40,000
visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, days, visitors, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Music sites
  • Web traffic
  • Number of visits
  • Trend analysis
  • Initial phase
  • Steady increase
  • Fluctuations
  • Significant change
  • Peaks
  • Turning point
  • Growth rate
  • Seasonal variation
  • Comparative analysis
  • Long-term trend
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