Some people think person happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe this depends on other factors. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that what
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happiness can be a debatable subject.
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it is a commonly held belief that economic success can have a direct effect
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happiness for individuals, there is
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an argument that opposes it.
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essay will analyse
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topic from both points of view and express my opinion.
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structure
Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Your introduction should set the stage for the discussion and your conclusion should provide a clear summary or opinion.
cohesion
Improve coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect ideas smoothly across the essay.
development
Develop each point thoroughly with explanations and examples. Make sure to discuss both sides of the argument in dedicated paragraphs.
introduction
Expand on your introduction by outlining the key arguments that will be discussed. Include a thesis statement that signifies your own view.
examples
Provide specific, detailed examples and explanations to support your points.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic success
  • material wealth
  • emotional well-being
  • psychological satisfaction
  • personal fulfillment
  • quality of life
  • financial stability
  • socioeconomic status
  • mental health
  • sense of purpose
  • interpersonal relationships
  • cultural norms
  • subjective well-being
  • life satisfaction
  • luxuries
  • financial security
  • self-actualization
  • work-life balance
  • non-materialistic values
  • livelihood
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