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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagrams compare the central library floor plan from 20 years ago to now.
Overall
, nowadays, there
are
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is
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 significant development of the function in each
room
 of the library.
Moreover
, several rooms have been transformed into a new shape.
At
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In
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 the north-west,
room
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the room
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 for CDs, videos, and computer games has been replaced by children's fiction
books
 and
place
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a place
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 for storytelling events
within
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on
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sofa
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the sofa
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 inside the
room
.
This
 space
also
 become larger than before. Below that, adult fiction
books
relocated
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were relocated
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 to the east and replaced by all reference
books
.
Move
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 to the
south east
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southeast
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, the reading
room
had
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was
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 demolished and it has been transformed into a computer
room
. In the
center
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centre
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 of
this
 area, tables and chairs
already
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have already
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removed
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been removed
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, so that it
become
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becomes
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 unused now.
Furthermore
, a new lecture
room
 located in
north east
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northeast
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subtitute
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substitute
 the children's
books
. Next to it, adult non-fiction
books
 had been demolished and
change
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changed
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 into information
desk
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desks
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 and self-service machines.
Lastly
, in the
south east
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southeast
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,
enquiry
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the enquiry
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 desk
replaced
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was replaced
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 by
cafe
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a cafe
the cafe
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 with a different shape of
the
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apply
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room
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room, books with synonyms.
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