The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree?

Is setting a higher
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
price of
fuel
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
the most effective way to solve the world's
enviromental
Correct your spelling
environmental
issues? I disagree with that
statment
Correct your spelling
statement
because it's not solving the problem.
People
will choose to accept the price increase because the
cost
of switching to other
alternative
Fix the agreement mistake
alternatives
show examples
right now is still expensive and the
insentive
Correct your spelling
incentive
of switching to more As long as many transportation and other
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
show examples
depend on
fuel
, most
people
will always
willing
Add a missing verb
be willing
show examples
to pay the
cost
of the
fuel
because it's cheaper than switching to eco-friendly
option
Fix the agreement mistake
options
show examples
like electric
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
show examples
, solar
pannel
Correct your spelling
panels
show examples
to generate electricity, etc. For electric
vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
show examples
, the facilitation to
charging
Wrong verb form
charge
show examples
the car is limited in big
city
Fix the agreement mistake
cities
show examples
only and most of the electricity in my country
produced
Add a missing verb
is produced
show examples
from coal power plants so
people
still find it
inconvenience
Replace the word
inconvenient
show examples
to purchase it. In my country, the
insentive
Correct your spelling
incentive
of switching to electric
vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
show examples
is not
desireable
Correct your spelling
desirable
. The
government
only give a smaller rate of tax for electric
car
Fix the agreement mistake
cars
show examples
or
motorcyle
Correct your spelling
motorcycles
compare
Wrong verb form
compared
show examples
to the
cost
of switching to
those option
Change the determiner
that option
those options
show examples
is not really beneficiary. Even the
government
limited the amount of power produced by solar
panel
Fix the agreement mistake
panels
show examples
for personal use
in house
Add a hyphen
in-house
show examples
. It's only
limitied
Correct your spelling
limited
to 20% and the rest of it
still
Add a missing verb
is still
show examples
from the state-owned company. From
those policy
Change the determiner
that policy
those policies
show examples
, the
people
believe that the
government
Add a verb
government is
government was
show examples
still inconsiderate with the environmental issues. In conclusion, increasing the
fuel
price is not the best alternative to protect
environment
Add an article
the environment
show examples
. Not all
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
people
can switch to other renewable options
easly
Correct your spelling
easily
because the
cost
is too high. The
government
also
not
Add a missing verb
does not
show examples
give enough
insentive
Correct your spelling
incentive
to make
people
choose more
environtmental
Correct your spelling
environmental
environmentally
friendly
option
Fix the agreement mistake
options
show examples
.
Submitted by fadhlannaufaall on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Coherence & Cohesion
To improve the logical structure of your essay, ensure that your ideas flow in a logical sequence and each paragraph has a clear central idea. You can achieve this by creating an outline before you start writing the essay that includes the main points you want to discuss and arranging them in the most effective order.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a proper introduction and conclusion that clearly state your position and summarize your main points. Your introduction should introduce the topic and your thesis statement, while your conclusion should restate your opinion and summarize the key points of your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance your main points, make sure they are fully developed with detailed examples and explanations. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, and you should elaborate on that idea with specific details and reasons.
Task Achievement
To fully address the task, make sure your essay directly responds to each part of the prompt. You should clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement and provide a thorough explanation of your reasoning, including a clear argument and relevant examples.
Task Achievement
In order to express clear and comprehensive ideas, work on the clarity of your expression and the precision of your language. Avoid general or vague statements and strive to be as specific as possible in your explanations and examples.
Task Achievement
Incorporate relevant and specific examples to bolster your arguments. These examples should be grounded in real-world scenarios or factual information that directly supports your position on the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: