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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some individuals that every person ought to donate a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
support
charity
,
however
, I do not agree with
this
 statement.
To begin
 with, it is common knowledge that nowadays the majority of people have loans and from my point of view in today’s society it is challenging to find a decent job with a high salary
and
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needless to say that if they
donated
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 a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
charity
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a charity
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 they would not be able to survive.
For instance
, my aunt searched for a job 2 years and after finding a job she had to take loans
and
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it was hard for her to survive because she
also
 had to take care of her children, and I am positive that it would be unbearable for her if she had to donate a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
support
charity
.
Secondly
, I reckon that donating a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
support
charity
 is not a duty, there is no denying the fact that it would be incredible to donate
money
 to
support
charity
,
however
, it is not a responsibility, in my
opinion
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 individuals ought to donate
money
 to
support
charity
 if they desire.
For example
, my mother adores helping others and frequently she donates
money
 to
support
charity
,
however
, she does that only because she wants
so
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. In conclusion, some individuals suppose that everyone should donate a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
support
charity
,
however
, I do not agree with
this
 claim because there are some people who have loans and are not able to donate a fixed
amount
 of their
income
 to
support
charity
also
 I believe that donating
money
 is not a duty and people should donate
money
 when they desire.
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