Task 1: People in your area are having problems with their internet connection. Write a letter to the company which provides the connection. In your letter: - describe the problems; - explain how it is affecting people; - say what the company should do to help.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you regarding an
internet
problem
. Our
neighborhood
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have
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had that
problem
for a long time. The
problem
started 6 months ago and it is continuing, we have
not
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no
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connection to
internet
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the internet
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. I guess, your connection line has broken or our cable
have
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a
problem
for example
maybe our cable could take
a
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damage.
For
this
reason
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reason,
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most people
could not
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cannot
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connect to
internet
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the internet
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.
This
problem
is affecting many people in our
neighborhood
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. Especially, many people who work on
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the internet
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internet
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and earn money. They have a
problem
and lose money.
Also
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many children are affected because they can not work on their lessons and they will take many
exam
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after 2 weeks We are waiting for your company to solve
this problems
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this problem
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. We have written many
letter
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and we have called your call
center
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many times but,
connection
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the connection
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problem
still exists.
For
this
reason
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we want to solve
this
problem
this
week or we are going to complain your company to
local
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authority. We are waiting for your response until
this
Thursday. Yours sincerely,
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task achievement
The letter partially addresses all three points of the task. However, the explanations are not fully extended or clear. Consider providing specific examples that highlight the severity of the problem and its impact on the community. Also, aim to structure your paragraphs in a way that each paragraph addresses a specific aspect of the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The letter has an appropriate opening and closing. However, the logical structure can be improved by clearly dividing the letter into paragraphs that reflect the structure of the task. Each bullet point of the task should correspond to one paragraph. Additionally, work on linking sentences and ideas more clearly to improve the flow of the letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is somewhat informal and lacks politeness in some parts. To achieve a more suitable formal tone, use more polite language and sentence structures. Avoid making direct complaints or threats as it may be construed as too aggressive for formal correspondence.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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