Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?

Healthcare
practicioners
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practitioners
often
advice
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that senior
people
should
exercise
regularly for better health.
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,
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several of them
are
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do
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not follow
this
advice.
This
essay will delve into the possible causes for
this
and put forward some practical solutions to encourage them to
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exercise
. First and foremost, an obvious reason for elder
people
hesitate
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to do
exercise
is
unavailability
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the unavailability
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of
peer
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peers
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to do
exercise
.
In other words
, the majority of
people
who are in the gym or sports facilities are young or
middle aged
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population,
therefore
,
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the
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senior
people
could not have
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the
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similar age companion for
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sports
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sport
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sports
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activites
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activities
or
exercise
.
Similarly
, fear of
sport
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injury,
unsurprisingly
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another cause of
hesistance
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resistance
hesitance
for
exercise
. To exemplify,
the
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recently published medical journal indicated that
sport
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sports
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injury is common in elder
people
which is detrimental
for
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their health.
Moreover
, the accessibility of
wellness
facilities and community
sport
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sports
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centers
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is another prominent reason for
this
issue.
Nevertheless
, the are some appropriate
way
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ways
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to address
this
issue,
First
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solution is
design
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to design
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specific
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a specific
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wellness
program for elder
people
. In detail, the local authorities should initiate
wellness
program
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programs
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specifically for senior
people
with the help of experts and proper guidelines.
This
will help to create a peer for the older
people
for group
activites
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activities
and reduce injuries. To illustrate, the NHS developed a guideline for
exercise
for geriatric
people
which helps to reduce injuries significantly. The authorities should
also
develope
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develop
more
wellness
and
communities
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community
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facilities specially designed for elder
people
which would attract them
for
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to
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regular
exercise
. In conclusion, the lack of companions for
exercise
, fear
to
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of
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injury and
accessiblility
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accessibility
issues are the major
reason
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reasons
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for
lack
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the lack
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of
exercise
in elder
people
. Ergo, specially designed
wellness
centers
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centres
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and
improve
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accessibility would help to resolve
this
issue.
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