The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2012.

The charts shows air pollution levels by different causes among four countries in 2012.
The presented bar graph presents information about the comparison of air
pollution
levels
in the company of four countries in 2012, with a focus on three main
sources
:
electricity
generation
,
transport
and
industry
.
Overall
, China had the highest
levels
of air
pollution
across all three
sources
,
while
Australia had the lowest.
Transport
was the leading cause of
pollution
in America,
whereas
in Japan,
industry
was the primary contributor. China experienced the most significant
pollution
from
industry
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at around 80
PPM
, followed by
transport
and
electricity
generation
, both exceeding 50
PPM
.
In contrast
, America’s highest
pollution
source
was
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transport
at approximately 60
PPM
, with
electricity
generation
and
industry
contributing less but still substantial
levels
. Japan had the highest
pollution
from
industry
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at about 45
PPM
,
while
transport
and
electricity
generation
were lower, each below 30
PPM
. Australia showed the least
pollution
, with all
sources
contributing under 20
PPM
, and
transport
being the highest among them. In summary, China and America had significant
pollution
from specific
sources
,
whereas
Japan and Australia had relatively balanced and lower
pollution
levels
.
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