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some people said that the best way to teach a child about co-operate is team sport? agree or disagree?

#people #child #co-operate #team #sport
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 the opinion. For me, the most basic education for
children
 comes from their homes with day-to-day tasks. Their mom and dad should be the
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 role
model
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 and
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 them about
co-operating
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 in the house. Some easy problems would arise and the parents could show their
children
 how to solve
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the problem
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problem
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 in
team work
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.
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, the mother is busy cooking
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dinner and has another task list which is cleaning the house. The father can communicate with the
children
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clean the house
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 the very least, tidy up their own toys.
Therefore
,
children
 could learn not only how to co-operate, but
also
 how to problem solve and help others.
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Task Achievement
To improve in task achievement, you should work on providing a more well-rounded opinion on the topic, addressing both sides where applicable and offering a completion of the response with a stronger conclusion to consolidate your argument. Additionally, ensure that your arguments fully respond to the prompt by discussing the specific subject, which in this case is 'team sport'.
Coherence & Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion enhancement, focus on organizing your essay with a clear introduction stating your opinion, body paragraphs each presenting a central idea and supporting details, and a conclusion summarizing your points. Employ cohesive devices effectively for logical flow and clarify your position more distinctly throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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