Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?
It is believed that we live at the pinnacle of human progress. I completely agree with
this
. However
, I think that the Renaissance would be a really interesting period in human history to live in. In this
essay, I am going to prove my point of view.
We have achieved a high level of development in various areas such
as medicine, construction, transportation and so on. For example
, many general citizens work in convenient offices with heating and air conditioning. Nonetheless
, there are plenty of contemporary trends, which make our society more passive than before. Whereas
some people invest in increasing standards of living, many others waste their free time on social media or playing computer games.
On the contrary
, before the Renaissance, life was dangerous and unpredictable. Many individuals started their work in the early morning and finished close to bedtime. Moreover
, it was highly likely to be called to war or die from an unknown illness. Even when they survived these perils, they lived very difficult lives. After those dark times, great advances were made in mathematics, chemistry, biology and science among others. Furthermore
, numerous remarkable masterpieces were created during this
period and lifted humanity to an unprecedented level. For instance
, we still admire their architecture.
To conclude
, although
these days have their merits, if I could select a period when I would be alive, I would choose the Renaissance. This
is because it was a time of rapid growth flourishing in many directions, which we can still see today.Submitted by d.i.kuprin on
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task achievement
While you have provided a clear opinion, consider expanding your examples to include more historical context or contemporary references, which will enrich your essay and strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Transition words and phrases have been used to a good extent but try to vary your choices to demonstrate a wider range of language.
task achievement
Be sure to develop each main point in more detail, providing stronger examples and explanations. This will make your essay more persuasive and engaging.
coherence cohesion
In the conclusion, you should summarize not only your own opinion but also briefly restate the main reasons for your choice to give a sense of closure to the essay.