Discuss a time that you made a decision based on data. How did the data influence a good or bad decision making process? Make sure to choose an example and to describe it in such a way that clearly illustrates your analytical and problem-solving abilities. Limit your response to 300 words.

While
I was working as
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RF optimization engineer, I had
a
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numerous experiences regarding
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decision making
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based on
data
. My job accomplishment
to
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get a better-quality
network
such
as voice and
data
throughput. So, I always had to seek what kind of solutions
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make to get a better
performance
by analyzing the
data
. The main target of
job
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is to meet
up
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the KPI criteria, which
is
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defined by the operator. To address the challenge, I use the necessary tools to check the signal quality
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real-time
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. When I saw some congested
cells
, I
had
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acted very quickly because it can affect the call drops and low throughput and
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. But, it had somehow problems which could not be able to solve
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,
for
example
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that
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coverage
is
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very congested, but the
neighbor
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cells
are high load so it cannot be possible to share
load
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with
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cells
. It was a big issue for us because we could lose many users.
On the other hand
, I can enhance the bandwidth for the high-load cell, it is
very
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effective solution, but it can affect frequency interference to other
cells
. For the long-term solution, I consider adding new
cells
or base
station
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around that area. And, I had to write a proposal letter to get
an
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approval to put
a
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new site because it is highly expensive. On
this
point, I really had to consider which is the good solution to improve the
network
performance
. Implementing the changes resulted in a significant improvement in
network
performance
, with a noticeable reduction in drop calls and increased
data
throughput. The analysis skill
is
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a great role for it that lead to good condition or bad
condition
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for the
network
. Once
decide
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the right decision, it would be beneficial for the whole
network
performance
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always
reached
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to
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the target that will be us
success
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. I
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made many decisions during my journey, and I achieved many successes in analyzing the
data
and issues and giving the best solutions to customers.
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