the table give databakery sales average in 2015
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table depicts information about a bakery’s average sales in three different Correct your spelling
The
kind
of branches Change to a plural noun
kinds
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and store
store
in four categories of Correct subject-verb agreement
stores
transactions
in 2015.
Overall
, all franchise
sold most Fix the agreement mistake
franchises
on
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apply
Croisant
, Medium Latte and Strawberry Correct your spelling
Croissant
tart
. Fix the agreement mistake
tarts
Then
the higher
Correct word choice
highest
transactions
was
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were
London
Covent Garden in 2015. And the lowest transaction was Change preposition
in London
London
St John’s Wood.
Based on data of transactions
in London
Covent Garden, there are 642 number of
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apply
transactions
and the value of the transactions
it-self
was 7.58 Euro and half of them eat-in Correct your spelling
itself
transaction
at 338. Fix the agreement mistake
transactions
Then
, the most popular meal in London
Govent Gargen was Croisant. On the other branches, London
Oxford Circus sold most on Medium Latte with the
total number of Correct article usage
a
transactions
were
538 and from Change the verb form
was
the
Change to a genitive case
the value of the transaction
the value of the transactions
transactions
value they earn
4.51 Euro in 2015. Wrong verb form
earned
Then
, more than half of the transactions
in 2015 was
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were
take
away at level 291 respectively.
In 2015 Wrong verb form
taken
London
St John’s Wood sold most on strawberry tart and the number of transactions
was more than 250. They earn
5.01 Euro Wrong verb form
earned
and
150 Correct word choice
apply
transactions
was
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were
dine
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done
in
and 119 Change preposition
apply
transaction
Fix the agreement mistake
transactions
was
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were
take
away.Wrong verb form
taken
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