Doctors recommend that older people should excersice regularly.However many of them do not exercise enough. What are the causes? What can be done to encourage them to exercise?
The elderly are often getting a recommendation from doctors to maintain their health by exercising in a routine schedule. It was argued that regardless of the suggestions which came from doctors, the majority of them still didn't do enough physical activities.
This
essay will discuss what may be causing this
situation and the suitable solution to deal with it.
There might be some reasons behind their lack of physical movements and one of them is believed that they don't have the same energy they had when they were young. It is apparent that human stamina gradually decreases as they get older, hence
why older people
often get tired when they only do a small amount of movements. For example
, some people
were capable of doing a 10 kilometres running marathon when they were in their early 20s but despite that when they reach the age of 60, their bodies as well as
strengths are not the same anymore to the point where some of them are only capable of walking instead
of running. Thus
, it's clearly visible why age causes the lack of exercise in older people
.
However
, as humans get older, it is still essential for them to maintain their conditions by doing workouts routinely as they are more prone to getting sick due to
their ages. There might be some solutions that can be done to motivate them to be physically active, one of them is by creating an event
which can gather a lot of people
, including the elderly, to encourage them and to make a habit out of a healthy lifestyle. Some studies said that people
tend to be indirectly spirited to do a certain activity if there are a bunch of people
who did it as well in the same place. For instance
, in Indonesia there is an event
called "Car Free Day" which is held every Sunday morning, there are various activities that people
of any age can do in this
event
which include exercising. Usually, there are no certain rules regarding what kind of workout people
can do at this
event
. Thus
, this
kind of event
may help elder people
to regularly do any physical movements which are suitable for them, such
as low-impact cardio.
To sum up
, it is understandable that older people
tend to not do enough physical activities because of the impact of their ages on their bodies. Regardless, a regular event
that engages people
to be physically active might be a solution that can be used to motivate them to maintain a healthy lifestyle.Submitted by racharrisons on
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