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The table shows about underground railway system

The table shows about underground railway system
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The provided graph depicts information about
underground
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the underground
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railway
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 system in six cities (London, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC,
Kyoto
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 and
Los
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Angeles
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).
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,
London's
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London
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 had the oldest system and the most
kilometres
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 of
route
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. Tkoyo's had the most
passengers
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 in each of
year
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.
Los
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Angeles's
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Angeles
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 had the latest system. But
Kyoto
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's got the less
kilometres
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 of
route
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 and
passengers
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 per
year
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. Turning to details, Lodon's
railway
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 started in 1863. It
got
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has
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 394
kilometres
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 of
route
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.
Tokyo's
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Tokyo
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 opened
at
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in
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 1927, but it had
1927million
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1927 million
passengers
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 per
year
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.
Kyoto
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's
railway
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 opened
at
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in
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 1981. After 20 years,
Los
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Angeles
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's
railway
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 opened. But
Los
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Angeles
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railway
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's
kilometres
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 of
route
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 and
passengers
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 were more than
Kyoto
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's.
Kyoto
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 just had 11 km and
45million
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45 million
passengers
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 per
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, kyoto, los, angeles, kilometres, route, passengers, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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