the diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as can fruit

the diagram below shows the multistage production of pears as can fruit
The flow chart illustrates how canned
pears
are manufactured.
Overall
, there are fourteen steps in the process, beginning with the collection of
pears
and ending with the delivery of completed products to shops.
Firstly
,
pears
are picked manually before being transported to a place where they are washed and cleaned, ready for quality checking. Those that reach a standard are stored at a low temperature, which can keep them fresh. Through the weighing stage,
pears
are classified into different groups based on their range of weights, and
then
ready to be peeled. At the eighth step, after being cored and sliced,
pears
experience a packaging stage including canning and sealing. After that, the fruits in cans are cooked until done and
then
sterilized. Following the previous step, various kinds of labels are stuck on the final products before storing them. These goods are kept in storage for a period of time and
finally
being shipped to supermarkets and stores for consumption
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