The graph below shows how people buy music.
The line chart given compares how music was purchased over a seven-year period from 2011 to 2018.
From an
overall
perspective, it is evident that the percentage of music was
bought by using CDs purchased saw a downward trend, Correct pronoun usage
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whereas
a reverse pattern could be seen in the figure for streams over the years shown.
At the beginning of the period, the proportion of CDs purchased was highest, at around 55%. The data on downloads was lower, at about 35%. Streams, however
, accounted for the lowest percentage, at about 5%.
In the following years, after reaching a peak of over 40% in the
mid-2015, the percentage of music products Correct article usage
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was
sold through download systems Unnecessary verb
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gruadually
fell to 30% in 2018. Correct your spelling
gradually
Furthermore
, there was a significant decrease in the figure for CDs purchased from 50% in 2012 to approximately 25% in the final year, whereas
that of streams underwent a considerable increase from just nearly 10% in 2013 to 30% in 2017, before rising to a top of over 40% at the end
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