In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The advancement of technology enables us to substitute
animals
as the main resource of both food and products. Such
as switching tiger leather with a synthetic one or using plant-based food rather than cow's meat. Thus
it is unnecessary to keep using animals
as the main ingredients. Obviously, this
has some pros and cons which I will discuss in detail in the passage below.
The obvious advantage of substituting animals
is that environmental sustainability would be much greater than it currently is. It is a widely known fact that animals
were being killed for the sake of humans, be it for clothes or meals. For example
, the polar bear is on the edge of extinction due to
being killed by people just to get their skin. This
action has been going on for years, and it even happened to a variety of animals
, including elephants, tigers, zebras, and many more.
On the other hand
, the technology still has some limitations as the products that are currently being made with synthetic substances or plant-based meals do not really replicate the nature of animals
. There has been an innovation of developing a steak made from pure mushrooms. But, because its natural texture is quite soft, it could not really feel like meat. Similarly
, wearing a jacket made from the imitation of tiger leather is not as comfortable as using real leather.
In summary, there are some advantages and disadvantages of changing the use of animals
. In this
case, I completely disagree, but it is important to note that the animal's life is as important as ours.Submitted by mikeasad on
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