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Some people thik that there should be strict laws to control the amount of noise a person makes beacause of the disturbance it causes to people. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Dear Mr. Yadav, I am writing
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 letter to you Inform you that my name is Parth Patel and
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 lived in your
house
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weekend
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 with my family. My life
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and
 two children's.I have some
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house
. First of law, your
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condission
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condition
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 very badly. like chairs are broken,
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 table damages and some other furniture sofa sat and T.V table and
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. you told me all
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available
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. But all furniture and carpet are not well.
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 rent. My all
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 in three days. I take some
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 and repaired all
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furniture
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. Your Faithfully, Parth Patel.
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are essential for a logical structure. Start by clearly introducing the topic, then outline the main points you will discuss, and finally, provide a conclusion that summarizes the key points and restates your position.
coherence cohesion
The main points need to be more clearly supported by specific examples or explanations. Focus on developing each main point with clear reasoning and specific instances where appropriate.
task achievement
To address the task achievement criteria better, ensure that you answer all parts of the question comprehensively. In your case, the essay should discuss the advantages and disadvantages of strict laws controlling noise levels. Provide clear and comprehensive ideas for each side of the argument.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs effectively to separate your ideas and improve the logical flow. Each paragraph should contain one main idea and be thoroughly explored before moving on to the next point.
coherence cohesion
Your essay would benefit from a final paragraph that clearly indicates the completion of the discussion and provides closure on the topic. Include a conclusion that summarizes the advantages and disadvantages you've discussed.
coherence cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors, as these can detract from the clarity of your ideas. Practice using a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance the readability of your essay.
task achievement
Include specific examples to support your points about the advantages and disadvantages of strict laws on noise control. This will help to demonstrate your understanding of the topic and give weight to your arguments.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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