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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph below illustrates the amount of tourists visiting a specific Caribbean
island
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 over a 7-year period, between 2010 and 2017. In general, it can be seen that most visitors preferred to visit the
island
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instead
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 of staying on
cruise
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 ships in 2010,
while
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 in 2017
cruise
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 ships were more popular. If we look at the
cruise
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 ship tourists in the first 4
years
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, it fluctuated between 0.25 and 0.5.
Cruise
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 ship rate increased dramatically in the next 4
years
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 from 0.5 to 2. Despite
island
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 visitors remaining stable in the first year, it had a sharp rise between 2011 and 2013 when reached a peak at 1.5 and
then
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 leveled off for the next 2
years
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.
Although
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, In the
last
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 2
years
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island
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 tourists had a fluctuation,
cruise
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 ships got more popular and had greater visitors in number, compared to 1.5 and 2 respectively. The total number of people who had been on
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the Carribean
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Carribean
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Caribbean
island
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 rocketed from 1 to 3.5 after 7
years
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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