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20.More and more plastic is polluting cities, countrysides and oceans. What are the problems caused by plastic waste? What measures should be taken to solve it?

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recent years, we have seen an enormous increase in the amount of oil products that
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 been released
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 the environment.
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 issue has brought us a
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 of crises that destroying the habitat of living things is the major problem and there are some ways to reduce that as well.
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 of problems caused by plastic pollution. Pollutants can destroy the habitat of particular species of animals and birds which
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 them to migrate to
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 which can disrupt human activities. Because the arctic ice has melted increasingly in
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recent years,
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, some bears are forced to inhabit lands near human
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 they don't have sufficient food, they attack humans.
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, oil products can kill and even make animals
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 of diseases can spread and
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 serious and dangerous illnesses.
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 as snakes that eat mice and prevent the spread of some sicknesses. But in some places, plastic
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 increased snake migration and contributed to
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 of some illnesses. On the other side, there are a
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 of ways to counteract these dangers. Governments should invest more money and give more resources to companies to make green plastics cheaper and promote it among people.
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, especially children, should be more aware of
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 dangers of these
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 and strive to make it part of their cultures.
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 in Japanese schools, teachers encourage children to use natural and environmentally friendly containers to help the wildlife.
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, the uses of fossil
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 bags are getting more extensive which can put the lives of living things into danger. People should obey the rules to help the environment and other animals to prevent the extinction of creatures.

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Task Achievement
Make sure to address the topic directly and maintain a clear focus throughout the essay. The introduction should clearly define the problems and measures related to plastic waste specifically, rather than discussing oil products in general. Provide a thesis statement that maps out the issues and solutions you plan to discuss.
Task Achievement
Develop your main points with specific and relevant examples. While you mention animals being affected by plastic waste, it would be beneficial to provide concrete examples of incidents or studies that highlight the severity of the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance the logical structure of your essay by organizing ideas more clearly. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by specific examples and explanations. Use topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion should directly address the topic of plastic pollution. The conclusion, in particular, needs to summarize the main points discussed and restate the importance of the issue and the necessity for solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs more effectively. While some connectors are used, variation and appropriate application can improve the flow of information.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • single-use plastics
  • biodegradable
  • aesthetic value
  • urban flooding
  • heat island effect
  • marine life
  • entangled
  • toxic chemicals
  • waste disposal
  • food chain
  • public awareness
  • recycling infrastructure
  • sustainable solutions
  • environmental impact
  • taxes or levies
  • reduced agricultural productivity
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