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A growing number of people rely on rstaurants and convenience food (frozen food and packaged meals) rather than home-cooked food to supply most of their meals. What are the advantages and disadvantages of eating this way?

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In recent years, an increasing number of citizens have preferred to eat at
restaurants
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 or dairy shops
instead
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 of cooking at their residences. Many people argue that buying from
restaurants
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 or superstores is easier than cooking at home,
while
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 others believe that preparing at home has more protein, is fresh, and is cheap. The main advantage is that it is easy to get and saves a lot of time because nowadays people are busy with their jobs.
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, another factor is that there is no need to buy raw materials to keep in the kitchen,
instead
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 just visit a restaurant or convenience store to buy and eat or take away, which saves time in washing dishes and kitchen cleanings.
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, many adults buy lunch from big store chains
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 as Burger King and McDonald's.
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, cooked food at a flat has many nutrients and vitamins,
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 its freshness.
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, it is cheap as compared to
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 or convenience stores. Another factor is that it can be cooked as per requirements.
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, in
restaurants
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, a big portion is served which is sometimes hard to digest for a single person and it creates many health issues.
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, people in India cook at residences for their families, which is cheap and healthy and has many nutrients.
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, families save money and use that money for other welfare purposes. In conclusion, following the analysis of both advantages and disadvantages,
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 cooking at home is cheap and is more healthy, but eating at
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 or shops is quick and fast, which saves a lot of time but it is expensive and has more calories

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