The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the facilities of a major university in 2012.
The bar chart illustrates information about the proportion of academic
staff
, by gender, across the faculties of a major university in 2012.
Overall
, major differences can be seen in education and engineering, where the proportion of students, by gender, was enormous. Whereas
, in other majors, it is properly balanced in one way or another.
Business and science had the majority of men, where they accounted for 65% for
both majors. Change preposition
of
On the other hand
, medicine was properly balanced, inclining towards women
by 1 per cent. By contrast
, engineering had an enormous gender gap, where women
comprised only 15% of academic staff
.
Nevertheless
, the same tendency but the opposite is for education, where female staff
members accounted for 75% totally
. In comparison, the percentage of arts is 55 for Change the word
total
women
and 45 for men respectively. Law, on the other hand
, had 60% of men in academic staff
, where it was 40% for women
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