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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram depicts the the floor plan of the public library 20 years ago and its current look.
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, the plan keeps the general scheme of the plan as it is still divided for two sides by a long corridor only it was renewed with up-to-date facilities through time. When people entered the central library 20 years ago, they could notice the
room
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 for reading newspapers and magazines on the right
side
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 and the enquiry desk on the left
side
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. Currently, the reading space has changed into a computer
room
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 and enquiry desk to the cafe. If people follow
this
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 long corridor, it is noticeable that the lines of fiction
books
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 for adults
in
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on
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 the right
side
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 of the library which
was
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were
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 replaced on the left
side
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 now,
as well
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as
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 there were added self-service machines there too. The space for adult non-fiction was removed totally. In the place of previous adult fiction
books
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 were located all reference
books
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. The
room
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 for CDs, video and computer games was changed into the
room
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 of events for telling stories and with space for children's fiction
books
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. The previous children's
room
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 was changed into a lecture
room
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 which was lacking previously.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, side, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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